雅思大作文語(yǔ)料庫(kù)：老師的影響比父母大嗎

【教育類(lèi)】

For schoolchildren, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social development than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 是否同意在孩子們的智力和社交方面，老師的影響比父母大?

【老師點(diǎn)評(píng)】恒熱教育，原題重現(xiàn)。

【雅思題庫(kù)】

Once children start school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social development than parents do. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 孩子們上學(xué)后，在學(xué)習(xí)能力和社交能力的發(fā)展方面，老師比父母的影響更大，你在多大程度上同意這個(gè)觀點(diǎn)?(2008年9月6日雅思題目)

【老師點(diǎn)評(píng)】語(yǔ)意升格

【頭腦風(fēng)暴導(dǎo)言】

父母是孩子們的啟蒙教師，孩子們是父母?jìng)兊囊幻骁R子。因?yàn)槭枪茄?，父母?jìng)儽灸苤異?ài)在孩子們的知識(shí)拓展和社交技能方面影響頗深。然而，一旦幼童開(kāi)始步入課堂，尤其是開(kāi)始接受中小學(xué)教育之后，教育者在他們的學(xué)業(yè)、社交、人生觀等方面的影響也許更加顯著。

【作家立場(chǎng)】比之父母，老師對(duì)于孩子的智力開(kāi)發(fā)和社交培養(yǎng)影響更加深刻，但是，我們不能忽視父母?jìng)冊(cè)诤⒆觽兂砷L(zhǎng)中的作用。

【思路拓展】

① 為何老師對(duì)于孩子們的智力開(kāi)發(fā)和社交技能的培養(yǎng)影響深刻：

1. 確實(shí)，老師有助于孩子們的智力開(kāi)發(fā)及學(xué)業(yè)的優(yōu)異，因?yàn)槔蠋焸兺ǔ＞▽?zhuān)業(yè)知識(shí)，了解教育常識(shí)，可以總結(jié)學(xué)科精華，因此，老師們的教育更加高效。同時(shí)，一個(gè)學(xué)生大部分時(shí)間是呆在學(xué)校里，因此，老師的教育會(huì)對(duì)學(xué)生的學(xué)業(yè)有潛移默化的影響。

2. 另外，老師在培養(yǎng)孩子的社交技能方面也可以發(fā)揮重要的作用，教育孩子們?nèi)绾我哉_的方式和周?chē)耐瑢W(xué)交往及交流，鼓勵(lì)孩子們擴(kuò)大交友圈，是老師們的職責(zé)所在。

②為何父母對(duì)于孩子們的智力開(kāi)發(fā)和社交技能的培養(yǎng)亦有影響：

1. 父母也可以影響孩子們的智力成長(zhǎng)，有些父母本身就是優(yōu)秀的教師，其專(zhuān)業(yè)優(yōu)勢(shì)可以在一定特定的領(lǐng)域讓孩子成長(zhǎng)更快。

2. 父母也可以影響孩子們的社交技能。常言道：父母是最好的老師，父母是孩子們的第一個(gè)老師，因此是孩子們效仿的對(duì)象，父母的言行舉止對(duì)于孩子如何與人交往是起到了潛移默化的影響。同時(shí)，因?yàn)楦改副灸艿貝?ài)孩子，所以會(huì)有意識(shí)地教育孩子行為處事。在處理人際關(guān)系方面，多數(shù)父母會(huì)教育孩子們尊敬長(zhǎng)輩，團(tuán)結(jié)同齡人等。因此，不能忽視父母對(duì)于孩子成長(zhǎng)的影響。

【總結(jié)立場(chǎng)】

我認(rèn)為，父母和老師對(duì)于孩子的發(fā)展都有深遠(yuǎn)的影響。比之父母，老師對(duì)于孩子的智力和社交能力的培養(yǎng)具有更加深刻的影響，尤其是當(dāng)孩子們開(kāi)始接受中小學(xué)教育之后。

【范文賞析】

【首段】 背景介紹 + 爭(zhēng)議焦點(diǎn) + 作家立場(chǎng)

Numerous people will exert a profound impact on one’s character-training，mental growth and future life. Parents are our initial teachers, yet, educators will also be playing an increasingly crucial role in one’s academic study and social life. An opinion springs up that teachers impose a far more significant influence on one’s study and social development compared with parents. Basically, I side with the standpoint，however，the impact of parents can never be ignored.

【解析】

1. Parents are our initial teachers 父母是我們最初的老師。

2. An opinion springs up that …… 有人認(rèn)為……

3. impose a far more significant influence on …… 有更加深遠(yuǎn)的影響

【二段】 支持原題觀點(diǎn)

Granted, some convincing arguments could be easily explored to justify that teachers exert a noticeable effect on those who are in the formative years in terms of social skills and intelligence development. For a start, as for students, since the majority of their time is spent in the classroom, thereby, teachers will exert a subtle influence on their cultivation of study habits or learning methods. Further，teachers usually excel in professional knowledge，summarize the core of knowledge and have deeper insight into the common sense of education，thus，they can help students excel academically

Last, it is the obligation of educators to guide students how to communicate and associate with peers in a proper way. More precisely, one’s commutation skills could be fostered and one’s suitable social ability could be developed with the assistance and guidance of teachers.

【解析】

1. exert a noticeable effect on…… v對(duì)于……有顯著的影響

2. those who are in the formative years n 成長(zhǎng)中的年輕人

3. exert a subtle influence on their cultivation of study habits or learning methods v對(duì)于他們學(xué)習(xí)習(xí)慣和方法的培養(yǎng)有潛移默化的影響

4. help students excel academically v幫助學(xué)生們精通學(xué)業(yè)

5. it is the obligation of educators to …… v 做……是教育者職責(zé)所在

【二段】 讓步原題觀點(diǎn)的局限性

Nonetheless，it is rather groundless simply believe that parents have no roles to play in children’s sociability and academic performance. First，parents, in most cases, know better about their children and are instinctively willing to devote their love to the development of their children. In this sense, some talented or knowledgeable parents could successfully help children achieve more in academic study. Also， almost every parent will educate their child to respect the old and unite the peers. In light of this statement，parents impose a marked effect on their children’s social development.

【解析】

1. Nonetheless，it is rather groundless simply believe that …… 然而，簡(jiǎn)單認(rèn)為……是相當(dāng)膚淺的

2. in light of this statement v基于這樣的說(shuō)法

3. impose a marked effect on …… v對(duì)于……施加顯著的影響

【尾段】 再次亮明觀點(diǎn)

In a nutshell，my view is that under no circumstances can we ignore the indispensable roles parents could play in their children’s development. Virtually, both teachers and educators exert profound influence on one’s intelligence and social kills. However, once schooling starts, teachers will have more influence.

【解析】

However, once schooling starts, teachers will have more influence. 一旦開(kāi)始接受中小學(xué)教育，老師的影響更加顯著。

【全文點(diǎn)評(píng)】

本篇為多年之前的舊文，現(xiàn)精細(xì)修改之后和童鞋分享。老師像鳥(niǎo)兒愛(ài)護(hù)自己的羽毛一樣愛(ài)惜著自己的每篇文本。惜墨如金，字斟句酌，僅希望每一次的分享都可以給讀者帶來(lái)一點(diǎn)快樂(lè)、啟迪和收獲。

【老師語(yǔ)料庫(kù)】

1. exert a noticeable effect on ……v有顯著的影響

2. impose a marked effect on …… v有顯著的影響

3. exert a subtle influence on v對(duì)于……施加了潛移默化的影響

4. respect the old v尊敬老人

5. unite the peers v 團(tuán)結(jié)同齡人

6. campus activities n校園活動(dòng)

7. it is certainly true that = a hard truth is that …… 這是事實(shí)

8. communication skills，group awareness and co-operation ability n交流技能，團(tuán)體意識(shí)及合作能力

9. make it easy for him or her to get along with others when he or she grows up. 使他在長(zhǎng)大的時(shí)候很容易和人交往

10. parents are generally most concerned about the growth of their children 父母通常更加關(guān)注孩子們的成長(zhǎng)。

11. Most children tend to unconsciously imitate everything. 多數(shù)孩子們會(huì)無(wú)意識(shí)地模仿父母。

12. Most parts of children education are virtually beyond parents’ reaches. 孩子的學(xué)習(xí)父母?jìng)儫o(wú)法教授。

13. Most of teachers are usually adept at professional knowledge 大多數(shù)老師精通專(zhuān)業(yè)知識(shí)。

【解析】 are usually adept at = excel in = be good at v熟練于，精通于……

14. have deeper insight into the common sense of education v了解教育的常識(shí)

15. summarize the core of knowledge v總結(jié)學(xué)科的精華

16. …… exert a far more profound influence on students’ academic study v對(duì)于學(xué)生的學(xué)習(xí)影響更深

17. Parents, in most cases, know better about their children and are instinctively willing to devote their love to the development of their children. 父母最了解孩子，本能地最?lèi)?ài)孩子。

【解析】instinctively adv本能地

18. how to associate and communicate with peers in a proper way v如何和同齡人以恰當(dāng)?shù)姆绞浇煌徒涣?/p>

19. Students’ social skills could also be greatly affected by those teachers because they take them as role models 學(xué)生們的社交技能會(huì)受到老師的影響，因?yàn)楹⒆觽兡美蠋煯?dāng)成偶像。

20. Both teachers and educators exert profound influence on one’s intelligence and social kills. 父母和老師對(duì)于孩子的發(fā)展都有深遠(yuǎn)的影響。