2015年12月12日雅思寫(xiě)作回憶(老師版)
Reading story books is better for children than watching television or playing computer games. Do you agree or disagree. 讀書(shū)比看電視和玩游對(duì)于孩子更有利好,是否同意?
【老師預(yù)測(cè)】 (針對(duì)2015年12月12日)
A study shows that a lot of children from the age 7 to 11 spend too much time watching television or playing video games. How do you think this problem influence the children their families and the society? What measures should be taken to solve?研究顯示:7-11歲的孩子花費(fèi)太多時(shí)間看電視或者玩游戲,這對(duì)于孩子和社會(huì)有哪些影響,如何解決?
【范文賞析】
【首段】 背景介紹 + 爭(zhēng)議焦點(diǎn) + 作家立場(chǎng)
The contrivance of the television and the Internet has greatly diversified modern people’s cultural life,especially those children or teenagers. People differ greatly in their views as to whether or reading story books exerts a far more beneficial influence on those who are in the formative years compared with watching television or playing on-line games. My stand is that watching television and playing games is superior to reading story books.
【解析】
The contrivance of the television and the Internet has greatly diversified modern people’s cultural life 電視和網(wǎng)絡(luò)的發(fā)明極大地豐富了人們的精神生活。
【二段】讓步原題觀點(diǎn)的合理性
Indeed,children can become the beneficiaries of reading story books. This debate reminds me of my little bother Paul. As a keen lover of reading, he is in the habit of reading extensively, he has already punished a number of stories through enthusiastic reading and constant writing practice. After all, first-class books are the summarization of excellent ideas and rich cultural deposits, so, I have to concede that reading excellent story books can stir one’s imagination, stimulate one’s creativity, strengthen one’s literacy and thus deepen one’s insight into life.
【解析】
Reading excellent story books can stir one’s imagination, stimulate one’s creativity, strengthen none’s literacy and thus deepen one’s insight into life. 閱讀優(yōu)秀故事書(shū)籍,可以激發(fā)人的想象力和創(chuàng)造力,增強(qiáng)人的讀寫(xiě)能力及對(duì)于生活的洞察。
【三段】反駁原題觀點(diǎn)之不合理性
Notwithstanding all that, we can never undervalue the benefits brought about by playing games or watching television. First, instructive television programs could also enact the role of educator. To illustrate, many prevailing talk show or speech contest programs are full of inspiring information. The anchors of those programs are extremely agile and eloquent, hence, TV viewers’ view of life could be greatly enlarged. Also, properly playing on-line games, by occupying time so constructively, makes teenagers contented, with no time for boredom. Meanwhile, playing computer games help develop the players’ intelligence and teamwork spirit because many challenging team games need strategy and cooperation.
【解析】
1. Anchors of those programs are extremely agile and eloquent. 這些節(jié)目主持人思維敏銳、口才俱佳。
2. Properly playing on-line games, by occupying time so constructively, makes teenagers contented, with no time for boredom. 適度游戲,通過(guò)有建設(shè)性地利用了時(shí)間,使人心滿(mǎn)意足,再也沒(méi)有無(wú)聊之感。
【尾段】再次亮明觀點(diǎn)
In closing, it is a hasty decision to simply conclude that reading can benefit youngsters more in comparison with playing games or watching television.
【全文點(diǎn)評(píng)】老師原創(chuàng)范文只是雅思寫(xiě)作之一種。文無(wú)定法,觀點(diǎn)無(wú)所謂對(duì)錯(cuò),只要能夠自圓其說(shuō)。本文依然采取讓步反駁寫(xiě)法,主題明確、邏輯清晰、文風(fēng)華麗,首尾呼應(yīng),符合雅思寫(xiě)作之評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn),可為考生賞析之佳作。
【原創(chuàng)語(yǔ)料庫(kù)】
1. relax one’s mood v放松心情
1. brighten one’s spirit v愉悅精神
2. relax one’s body and ease one’s mind v放松身心
3. have a broader view of life v 開(kāi)闊視野
4. enlarge one’s view of life v開(kāi)闊視野
5. enlarge one’s knowledge scope v拓寬知識(shí)面
6. add spice to one’s life v增加人生的樂(lè)趣
7. ease the intense pressure caused by tight academic timetable v緩解學(xué)習(xí)壓力
8. deepen one’s insight into oneself and life v加深對(duì)于生活的洞察
9. stimulate one’s vivid imagination v激發(fā)想象力
10. cultivate one’s speech-craft v培養(yǎng)口才
11. To open a book is always beneficial 開(kāi)卷有益
12. enact the role of educator v扮演教育者的角色
13. Lecture Room 百家講壇
14. social elite or famous professor n社會(huì)精英及知名學(xué)者
15. The major benefit is that television can meet one’s curiosity by providing a variety of informative programs. 電視最大的好處是可以通過(guò)提供各種咨詢(xún)豐富的節(jié)目來(lái)滿(mǎn)足我們的好奇心。
16. talk show and speech contest n脫口秀及演講比賽
17. exert a subtle influence on the TV viewers v對(duì)于電視觀眾有潛移默化的影響
18. develop one’s language skills v發(fā)展語(yǔ)言技能
19. cultivate one’s creative and independent thinking v培養(yǎng)人的創(chuàng)造性和獨(dú)立性思維
20. articulate and resourceful adj有口才的及足智多謀的
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