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雅思大作文語料庫:寒門出貴子還是將門出虎子

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2017年03月04日

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【教育類】

Some people believe that children who are brought up in families which don't have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up in wealthier families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?有人認(rèn)為,比之出生在富裕家庭的孩子,出生在貧困家庭的孩子更能面對(duì)成人生活中遇到的困難,是否認(rèn)同?

【創(chuàng)作感言】教育類為雅思恒熱考題,11月7日重復(fù)考察間隔年的利弊(A卷);父母和老師誰對(duì)于孩子的影響更大(B卷),其他經(jīng)典提問涉及到:“是否所有的父母都應(yīng)該學(xué)習(xí)育兒培訓(xùn)課程”,“窮爸爸和富爸爸的孩子誰更能面對(duì)人生的艱辛”,“是否沒有天賦的孩子不應(yīng)該學(xué)習(xí)外語”等等,今日分享經(jīng)典話題之一。

【頭腦風(fēng)暴導(dǎo)言】

命運(yùn)是有的,比如有人出身名門,有人出身寒門。人們說:“自古雄才多磨難,紈绔從來少偉男。”人們還說:“ 虎父無犬子。”寒門貴子還是將門虎子,這也許是永無共識(shí)的爭(zhēng)議話題。 窮爸爸的孩子不能屈服于命運(yùn):命運(yùn)給你一個(gè)比別人低的起點(diǎn),是想告訴你,讓你用你的一生去奮斗去出演一個(gè)絕地反攻的故事,這個(gè)故事關(guān)于夢(mèng)想、關(guān)于奮斗、關(guān)于堅(jiān)忍。富爸爸的孩子不能安枕于命運(yùn):命運(yùn)給你一個(gè)比別人高的起點(diǎn),是想告訴你,讓你用你的一生的奮斗去出演一個(gè)繼續(xù)奮勇的傳奇,這個(gè)故事關(guān)于家族、關(guān)于勵(lì)志、關(guān)于輝煌。

【作家立場(chǎng)】 盡管出身寒門的孩子可能會(huì)依賴自己的努力出類拔萃,出身富貴家庭的孩子更可能擁抱精彩的人生。

【思路拓展】

【為何窮爸爸的孩子能夠面對(duì)人生的艱辛】

1. 俗話說,“窮人的孩子早當(dāng)家,”貧困家庭的孩子從小就習(xí)慣了逆境和挫折,不能更多地依賴父母,他們只能自強(qiáng)不息、披荊斬棘、出人頭地,因此,他們更加獨(dú)立、成熟、堅(jiān)強(qiáng),生活的困境可助他們面對(duì)成人生活的艱辛。

2. 對(duì)于家境貧困的孩子們而言,他們有更加強(qiáng)烈的愿望改變命運(yùn),因此,他們有明晰的奮斗目標(biāo), 從這個(gè)意義上講,他們有可能在奮斗中鍛煉各種能力,這些能力可助人成長。

【為何富爸爸的孩子更能擁抱輝煌的人生】

1. 貧困家庭孩子很多是自卑的、內(nèi)向的,相反,富裕家庭的孩子通常是積極樂觀的,見多識(shí)廣的。豐富的閱歷和良好的心態(tài)有助于一個(gè)人面對(duì)人生的寒冷,學(xué)會(huì)堅(jiān)強(qiáng)。

2. 家境殷實(shí)的孩子,通??梢越邮芫⒔逃改?jìng)円矔?huì)潛移默化地給他們傳遞奮斗的正能量,這可使他們學(xué)業(yè)輝煌,為事業(yè)打下堅(jiān)實(shí)基礎(chǔ)。

3. 富爸爸們一般是來自精英階層,可以給孩子們提供最佳的人生指導(dǎo)、幫助他們建立良好的人脈網(wǎng)絡(luò),成就事業(yè)的輝煌。

【范文賞析】

【首段】 背景介紹 + 爭(zhēng)議焦點(diǎn) + 作家立場(chǎng)

We each have a destiny,some people are born into rich families,while others come from humble background. Perhaps no issue has led to such an endless debate to whether or not those who are raised by impoverished parents are more likely to brave the hardships when reaching adulthood in comparison with those who have financially richer parents. My stand is that although some children coming from poverty-stricken background might stand out in a crowd,it is better for children to be brought up in well-off families.

【解析】

1. We each have a destiny 命運(yùn)是有的

2. come from humble background v出身寒門

3. Perhaps no issue has led to such an endless debate to whether or not …… 也許沒有什么像是否……一樣引起人們無休止的爭(zhēng)議

4. brave the hardships when reaching adulthood v勇敢面對(duì)成人生活的艱辛

5. stand out in a crowd v出類拔萃

【二段】讓步原題觀點(diǎn)之合理性

I admit that a humble family background might have some positive roles to play in helping children ready themselves for adult life. For one thing, people of low or middle economic status often grow up to be self-made, mature and tenacious than those who are well-protected by affluent parents because they have to rely on honest hard work at early age. Harsh reality let them know they have no choice but to endeavor if they desire to outshine other peers. Hence, they have a deeper insight into the agonies of life. For another, poor children usually have burning desires to change their fates and thus they usually have a clear goal to strive for. Meanwhile, they are less likely to be frail or depressed when problems occur because they have been accustomed to the sense of failure and frustration

【解析】

1. ready themselves for adult life v為成人生活做好準(zhǔn)備

2. self-made, mature and tenacious adj自強(qiáng)的,成熟的,堅(jiān)韌的

3. have no choice but to endeavor v別無選擇,只能努力

4. outshine other peers v 超越同齡人

5. have a deeper insight into the agonies of life v對(duì)于生活的苦痛有更加深刻的洞察

6. have burning desires to change their fates v有強(qiáng)烈的改變?nèi)松\(yùn)的渴望

7. They have been accustomed to the sense of failure and frustration 他們對(duì)于失敗和挫折已經(jīng)習(xí)以為常

【三段】反駁原題觀點(diǎn)之不合理

Fine parenting,however,has positive roles to play in one’s growth and future. People can, in most cases, become the beneficiaries of their comfortable family background. Initially, children from affluent families tend to be more extraverted and positive because they, comparatively speaking, have rich experience of the world and good state of mind. In this sense, they can remain cheerful even in time of adversity. Also, well-to-do parents usually come from elite class, thereby, their personal struggle experience will set a fine learning example for their children. Meanwhile, many successful parents usually render more concerns over children’s moral education, character-training. To illustrate, many eminent entrepreneurs attributed their achievements to family influence. The third merit of boring into a well-to-do family is that elite parents can provide their children with more financial support, which could help the children realize many rosy dreams. For example, well-born children could receive better education, acquire more skills and travel around the globe and so on.

【解析】

1. fine parenting n良好的家庭教育

2. become the beneficiaries of their comfortable family background. 成為富裕家庭的受益者

【點(diǎn)評(píng)】comfortable adj 富裕的;舒服的

3. comparatively speaking adv 比較而言

4. have rich experience of the world and good state of mind v擁有豐富的人生閱歷和良好的心態(tài)

5. remain cheerful even in time of adversity v即使身處逆境也保持樂觀

6. Personal struggle experience will set a fine learning example for their children 個(gè)人奮斗的故事給孩子們樹立標(biāo)桿

7. usually render more concerns over children’s moral education, character-training v通常更加重視孩子的道德教育和性格培養(yǎng)

8. Many eminent entrepreneurs attributed their achievements to family influence 很多精英企業(yè)家把自己的成功歸結(jié)為家庭的影響。

9. can provide their children with more financial support v給孩子們提供財(cái)政支持

10. receive better education, acquire more skills and travel around the globe v接受更好的教育、學(xué)習(xí)更多技能、環(huán)游世界旅行

【尾段】再次亮明觀點(diǎn) + 總結(jié)理由

Overall, it is no easy task to judge which family background will definitely determine one’s fortitude and maturity. My firm stand is still that although children coming from poor family background might become mature and tenacious more quickly, it is more lucky for children to be raised by financially richer parents.

【解析】

1. It is no easy task to judge which family background will definitely determine one’s fortitude and maturity 判斷何種家庭背景一定會(huì)決定一個(gè)人的堅(jiān)毅和成熟,絕非易事

2. my firm stand is still that …… 我堅(jiān)定的立場(chǎng)依然是……

3. It is more lucky for children to be raised by financially richer parents. 由家境殷實(shí)的父母培養(yǎng)的孩子更加幸運(yùn)。

【全文點(diǎn)評(píng)】

雅思寫作,觀點(diǎn)無所謂對(duì)錯(cuò),只要能自圓其說。雅思寫作,考察的是作者頭腦風(fēng)暴、謀篇布局、駕馭語言的能力。本篇選擇華麗文風(fēng)寫作,展示作家文采。主題明確、淡化模板、思維辯證、有理有據(jù),可為考生賞析之佳作。

功夫在詩外,積累在點(diǎn)滴。建議童鞋先打造個(gè)性化的樸素版范文,不急于追求文風(fēng)之華美,先保證文字之精確、清晰、易懂,后期練筆,若能詞匯變化,句法多元,便是錦上添花。

 


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