Model 1
Advantages and Disadvantages of Cell Phone
手機(jī)的利與弊
手機(jī)的好處。
手機(jī)的弊端。
我的看法。
作文類型：提綱式各抒己見對比論文。
考點(diǎn)分析：
“手機(jī)的利與弊”屬提綱式各抒己見類議論文。也有書把此類寫作模式的作文歸類于匹配對比類或比較對比類作文。寫作的套路是“一些人認(rèn)為—— ;而另一些人認(rèn)為—— 。我的看法是—— 。”
本文恰符合這一寫作套路：一些人認(rèn)為手機(jī)有許多好處;另一些人卻認(rèn)為手機(jī)也有許多弊端。我的看法是：隨著中國入世，手機(jī)費(fèi)用會隨之大大下降，最終手機(jī)的利將遠(yuǎn)遠(yuǎn)大于弊。
應(yīng)當(dāng)指出的是各抒己見類作文與對比比較分析類作文極其相似，其主要差別在于：前者最后一段是闡述我的看法，而后者只是得出一般性的結(jié)論。
各抒己見類與對比比較分析類寫作套路是四、六級作文類型中最常見的，因此應(yīng)重點(diǎn)掌握。
審題構(gòu)思
這是篇提綱式議論文。根據(jù)提綱提示，文章可采用三段式行文，也可開篇引出導(dǎo)言段后，再采用四段式行文。經(jīng)分析，文中所給的三個漢語提示均可視為該段的主題句。全文框架如下，第一段主題句為：Cell phones are getting more and more important;二段主題句提綱點(diǎn)為：advantages of he cell phone;第三段的主題句提綱點(diǎn)為：disadvantages of the cell phone;結(jié)尾段的主題句應(yīng)為：My view is…。其全文及各段落框架具體構(gòu)思如下：
全文構(gòu)思
The cell phones are getting more and more popular and important.
Advantages of the cell phone
Disadvantages of the cell phone
My view is…
段落構(gòu)思
第一段：
Topic Sentence
The cell phone plays a more and more important role.
Developing Sentence
It has both advantages and disadvantages.
第二段：
Topic Sentence advantages of the cell phone
Developing sentence 1 facilitate people’s life
Developing sentence 2 convenient for both callers and callees
Developing sentence 3 can be used as a tool to get on Internet
第三段：Topic Sentence disadvantages of the cell phone
Developing sentence 1 expensive to buy and use it
Developing sentence 2 might be harmful to people’s health
第四段：Topic sentence My view is its positive aspects outweigh its negative aspects
Developing sentence It has a bright future in development
新詞拾貝
IT(information Technology)信息技術(shù)
cell phone手機(jī)
cellular phone users手機(jī)用戶
e-commerce電子商務(wù)
get on Internet上網(wǎng)
wireless mobile telephone無繩移動電話
精品詞匯
caller打電話者
callee受話人
via Internet通過因特網(wǎng)
conduct e-commerce從事電子商務(wù)工作 multifunction多功能
around the globe service全球通訊服務(wù) pocket computer袖珍電腦
絕妙銜接
Nowadays…but like everything else,….
First,…Second,…Most important of all,…
However, …To make matters worse, …worst of all, …Last but not least,…
In my opinion, …And…
良好開端
Nowadays, with the rapid development of IT, cell phones play a more and more important role in people’s life.
Nowadays, cellular phones are getting more and more popular in China. However, it has both advantages and disadvantages.
With the development of information industry and its service levels being improved, more and more people nowadays use cellular phones.
As a useful communication tool and a good companion in modern life , cellular phones have both positive and negative points.
As is well known, everything has two sides. Likewise, cell phones have both positive and negative aspects.
成功收口
It will be developed into Internet-enabled mobile phones, which will be as useful as pocket computers in the future. In a word, the advantages of the cell phone greatly outweigh its disadvantages.
With the rapid development of China’s telecommunications, the expenses of the cell phone will be greatly reduced, so that everyone will be able to afford one.
組段成篇
讀讀范文，看范文的篇章結(jié)構(gòu)，先用引言段引出手機(jī)既有利也有弊，接著對其利與弊進(jìn)行對比分析，最后提出自己對手機(jī)利與弊的看法。
范文：
Nowadays, with the rapid development of IT, cell phones play a more and more important role in people’s life. But, like everything else, they have both favorable and unfavorable aspects.
First ,it’s useful. As a wireless mobile telephone ,it’s easy and handy to carry it wherever one goes and call the callee however far away he is. Therefore, it greatly facilitates people’s life. Second, it’s convenient. Whenever one meets trouble or something urgent, one can make a call immediately. Most important of all, it’s a very helpful companion. With a multifunction cell phone in hand, one can easily get on the net, browsing the useful information, conducting e-commerce and doing whatever one can do via Internet.
However, just as everything has two sides, the cell phone also has many disadvantages,. To begin with, it’s expensive to buy and costly to pay the bills, esp. that of global service. To make matter worse, it’s also easy to lose and costly to get it repaired. Worst of all, it’s not as clear as a family telephone and sometimes the number dialed is often not available. Last but not least, it’s alleged the micro-waves in it might do harm to people’s health.
In my opinion, with its expenses greatly reduced after China’s entry into the WTO,. Someday most of them will be developed into new Internet-enabled mobile phones, which will be as useful as pocket computers. And I believe its advantages will not only offset its disadvantages, but also far outweigh them.
范文賞析
這是篇議論文，文章開篇入題，一步到位。先由手機(jī)的重要性直接引入議題，手機(jī)雖在人們生活中越來越重要，但也是利弊摻半，并以此承上啟下，自然過渡。
接著在第二段文章論述了手機(jī)的益處：方便、快捷、便于攜帶，可以用它上網(wǎng)等等。隨后，作者用“世上任何事物都是一分為二的”完成段落的過渡，進(jìn)而引出手機(jī)的弊端，如自身價格昂貴、費(fèi)用難以承受、易于丟失、有時因音量過小不清楚等等。
最后，權(quán)衡利弊，通過“In my opinion”作者亮出自己的觀點(diǎn)：隨著中國入世手機(jī)費(fèi)用的下降，“利”會遠(yuǎn)遠(yuǎn)超過“弊“，且手機(jī)未來的趨勢會向掌上電腦型發(fā)展。
