Model 2 Shopping on the Net
網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物
近來(lái)在一些發(fā)達(dá)地區(qū)出現(xiàn)網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物熱。
一些人喜歡網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物。
另一些人不喜歡網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物。
文體：議論文
四、六級(jí)作文類型：提綱式對(duì)比分析類議論文。
考點(diǎn)分析：
本文屬對(duì)比分析類議論文，也有人將其歸類于對(duì)比比較類或匹配對(duì)比類作文。此類作文要求對(duì)同種或兩種事物進(jìn)行比較，然后得出結(jié)論。嚴(yán)格地說(shuō)比較類的作文一般要求比較一件事物正反、優(yōu)劣等，然后下結(jié)論;而對(duì)比類作文大多是對(duì)兩個(gè)事物或兩種觀點(diǎn)從兩方面進(jìn)行比較，再提出自己的看法。
本文實(shí)際上是從客觀公正的角度對(duì)比網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物與傳統(tǒng)購(gòu)物。文章首先指出如今網(wǎng)絡(luò)時(shí)代我們?cè)诰W(wǎng)上無(wú)所不能，網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物悄然受到人們青睞。隨即圍繞網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物這一中心議題提出兩種不同態(tài)度。一些人喜歡網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物，他們認(rèn)為與傳統(tǒng)購(gòu)物方式相比，它快捷、方便、省時(shí)，選擇面大。實(shí)際上他們是拿網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的長(zhǎng)處比傳統(tǒng)購(gòu)物的短處。而另一些人對(duì)此不感興趣，他們對(duì)假冒偽劣產(chǎn)品十分謹(jǐn)慎，很怕上當(dāng)受騙。這些人是拿傳統(tǒng)購(gòu)物長(zhǎng)處比網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的短處，最后作者得出結(jié)論：網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物勢(shì)必會(huì)發(fā)展成不可抗拒的新的購(gòu)物趨勢(shì)。
審題構(gòu)思
“網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物“屬提綱式作文。根據(jù)題中所給漢語(yǔ)提示句提示，本文可用三段式的謀篇形式。開(kāi)篇段照應(yīng)提綱開(kāi)門見(jiàn)山地指出目前不僅出現(xiàn)了“上網(wǎng)熱”，而且出現(xiàn)了“網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物熱”――Nowadays many people tend to shop on the net。隨后在第二和第三段中闡明對(duì)網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的兩種不同觀點(diǎn)，并就此展開(kāi)討論。最后用一句話得出結(jié)論。因此第二段的主題句應(yīng)為：Some people prefer this new way of shopping。第三段主題句為：Others dislike the new trend of shopping。結(jié)論為：I believe it is an irresistible trend of shopping in the 21st century。全文和各段落具體框架結(jié)構(gòu)如下：
全文構(gòu)思
1.Nowadays many people tend to shop on the Net.
2.Some people prefer this new way of shopping.
3.Others dislike the new trend of shopping.
段落構(gòu)思
第一段：Topic Sentence Nowadays many people tend to shop on the Net.
Developing Sentence 1 Internet is revolutionizing our world.
Developing Sentence 2 We can do many things online.
第二段： Topic Sentence Some people prefer this new way of shopping..
Developing Sentence convenient and time-saving
第三段： Topic Sentence others dislike the new trend of shopping.
Developing Sentence fear of buying fake commodities
新詞拾貝
online網(wǎng)上;在線
on the WebNet網(wǎng)上
Website網(wǎng)站
Web page網(wǎng)頁(yè)
e-commerce電子商務(wù)
e-business電子商務(wù)
virtual shopping center網(wǎng)上虛構(gòu)的購(gòu)物中心
絕妙銜接
Nowadays,… As a matter of fact,… To illustrate,… However,…
Some…First, …besides, … Most important of all,…
However, others…First, …Besides,…Finally,… However,…
良好開(kāi)端
Nowadays Internet is revolutionizing our world and greatly facilitating our modern life, so that we can do many things on the Net.
Nowadays, with the arrival of knowledge economy age, we can do many things on the Web, such as conducting e-business, buying and selling stocks and even shopping at home via the Internet.
Nowadays, we can do many things via Internet. To illustrate, we can conduct e-commerce ,buy and sell stocks, buy train or air tickets and even shop on the Net.
Nowadays, shopping at home via Internet is becoming popular in many parts of the country.
成功收口
Therefore, they don’t think it’s the best way to shop on the Web.
Therefore, they doubt whether its advantages can outweigh its disadvantages, hence, they still continue their old practice.
Therefore, they didn’t show any interest in online shopping.
Therefore, they find it difficult to adopt the new way of shopping and still stick to he old way.
組段成篇
讀讀范文，看看文章的謀篇方式。先談悄然興起的網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物熱，引出中心議題“人們對(duì)網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物的兩種不同觀點(diǎn)”。最后作者從中得出自己的結(jié)論。
范文：
Nowadays Internet is revolutionizing our world and greatly facilitating our modern life. As a matter of fact, we can do almost everything on the net. To illustrate, we can conduct E-business, advertise our products, book an air ticket, buy and sell stocks, even hunt job on the web. Recently, shopping on the Net is gradually becoming popular in modern cities. However, people take different attitudes towards the new way of shopping.
Some people who prefer shopping on the virtual shopping centers or the e-commerce portals, hold that the new way of shopping has many advantages. First ,the web-stores can keep customers updated about the best selling products. Besides, they can provide customers with a wider range of choices. Most important of all , it is very convenient and time-saving .People can stay at home shopping whatever they want online.
However, others who stick to shopping in the real –life stores have their reasons. First, they argue that though time-saving, it’s a little bit complicated to pay on the Web. Besides, they think that customers can never rest assured of the quality of the commodities unless they see them with their own eyes. Finally, they believe the best way to be on guard against the fake and poor quality commodities is to shop in the traditional way. Therefore, they don’t show any interest in shopping online. However, more and more people will prefer shopping on the Web. And it’s believed that it will eventually be an irresistible trend of shopping in the 21st century.
范文賞析
本文屬議論文。文章立題新穎，緊扣時(shí)代發(fā)展的脈搏。語(yǔ)言清新、流暢。思路清晰，筆墨洗練。結(jié)構(gòu)完整，論述精當(dāng)。
文章用現(xiàn)象法開(kāi)篇指出因特網(wǎng)正在使我們的生活發(fā)生重大變化。如近來(lái)網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物悄然興起且日趨普及。
隨后第二段開(kāi)頭通過(guò)論述人們對(duì)網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物這一新生事物持兩種不同態(tài)度，承上啟下，自然過(guò)渡，進(jìn)而引出兩種不同觀點(diǎn)：一些人認(rèn)為網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物方便省時(shí)、擇物時(shí)選擇面大，商品信息新穎快捷;相反另一些人則對(duì)網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物持擔(dān)心、謹(jǐn)慎態(tài)度。他們認(rèn)為通過(guò)網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物購(gòu)買到的商品為假冒偽劣商品的可能性偏大。網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物使人心中不托底。最后，作者分析后得出結(jié)論：網(wǎng)上購(gòu)物這一新生事物必將成為21世紀(jì)購(gòu)物發(fā)展的方向。
