校園浪費現(xiàn)象
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic Reduce Waste on Campus. You should write at least 150 words according to the outline given below in Chinese:
1) 目前有些校園內(nèi)浪費嚴重
2) 浪費的危害
3) 從我做起,杜絕浪費
參考范文:
Reduce Waste on Campus
Nowadays, there is too much waste on some campus. You can see students leaving their dorms with lights on. You also find that many a student, after washing their clothes, doesn't bother to turn off the tap, leaving the water running. If you go to the cafeteria at dinner time, you are likely to see tables covered with the remains of all kinds of food.
Waste is very harmful. If you are extravagant with your money, you will soon be poor. Likewise, if human beings recklessly exploit the natural resources, then they are sure to have a gloomy future. What's more, being wasteful is a bad habit that, like a drug, gradually erodes a human being's virtues. Once a person grows wasteful, the virtue of frugality is eroded within him.
As far as I am concerned, I am determined to set a good example to combat waste, trying to use every grain and cent and call on more schoolmates to realize the necessity and importance of frugality. Only in this way, I think, can we hope to put an end to the waste on campus as soon as possible.
這篇模考作文題目是近年來六級??嫉脑掝},與校園有關(guān)的熱點或者有爭議的話題。例如,2010年6月和2011年6月考查了與大學(xué)生息息相關(guān)的熱點問題,分別是:學(xué)生忽視中文學(xué)習(xí)的問題和考證熱的問題;2010年12月的考題則是校園熱點話題:關(guān)于大學(xué)排名的問題。因此,這類話題作文,值得引起注意和重視。
具體來說,考生在體裁以及段落構(gòu)成方面,基本上采取現(xiàn)象描述+問題的嚴重性、危害性+措施的三段論形式即可。雖然看起來在難度上不是很大,但如果只是事先背過一些模板而沒有親自動手練習(xí)的話,作文分數(shù)會受到嚴重影響。因此,這里提醒考生,切記生搬硬套模板,而是要言之有物,有閃光點,有主題句,盡量表達多樣化。
以范文為例。在第一二段的描述現(xiàn)象和闡明危害性中,段首均有主題句,一目了然。尤其是“harmful”一詞,簡單明了地對段落做出了總的概括。另外,談?wù)撐:π詴r,還可以用到的詞匯和表達有:be harmful to,do harm to,be unfavorable to,have side effect on,the disadvantage of…。在接下來圍繞主題句展開時,第一要點是選擇兩到三個方面和角度來進行準確的表達和清楚的描述。由于考生身處校園之中,對校園浪費現(xiàn)象,比較熟悉且有話可說。可能除了范文第一段中所談到的 “不關(guān)燈”、“不關(guān)水籠頭”和“食物浪費”等現(xiàn)象,考生還會想到“大量打印造成的紙張浪費”、“長時間離開卻不關(guān)電腦”、“外賣時經(jīng)常使用一次性碗筷”等等,這就要求考生不是面面俱到,而是選擇自己最擅長表達的兩到三個方面,確保行文的準確和明晰。第二要點是在清楚的基礎(chǔ)上,有閃光點。
“bother”, ”remains”,”extravagant”,”recklessly exploit”, gloomy”, ”erode”, “frugality”,“combat”等較高級的詞匯和伴隨狀語、非謂語、從句、固定搭配的使用等多樣化的表達共同構(gòu)成了范文的閃光點。最后一點是言之有物。作文一旦要求有亮點,考生往往會故意堆砌華麗的辭藻和詞匯,將平時參考和背誦的范文照抄一部分上去,導(dǎo)致作文沒有實質(zhì)內(nèi)容。尤其是在最后表達措施時,角度和觀點一定要具體。范文中是采用“以我的觀點”、“以身作則”這一角度來寫。其他可供參考的思路:建議校園推出相關(guān)的規(guī)章制度;在校園倡導(dǎo)節(jié)約、反對浪費;舉行與反對浪費相關(guān)的校園主題活動等。另外,作文整體要注意句子、段落和篇章的邏輯。這一點要求考生能夠靈活、熟練地運用一些邏輯詞、關(guān)聯(lián)詞和一些相關(guān)短語、固定表達,比如,范文中的likewise, then, what’s more, as far as sb. is concerned, only in this way等。這里要提醒大家的是,部分考生會覺得這些邏輯詞都被人用爛了,因此想另辟蹊徑,而去選取一些較難、較生僻的表達,殊不知這樣反而容易出錯,弄巧成拙。