雅思寫作的十大“見官死”開頭

“見官死”開頭之一：廢話連篇不知所云(噴血指數(shù)：☆☆☆)

典型失敗案例： Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?

This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……

修改方案：開門見山 直奔主題

In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married.

Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information? (雅思真題)

Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.

Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection

Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn’t it? Of course! It’s really very very important!

“見官死”開頭之二：中式英文 人見人暈(噴血指數(shù)：☆☆☆☆☆)

典型失敗案例：Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life

In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……

Topic 2- The population problem

The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.

Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?

I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……

Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person

Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get “baoying”.
 

“見官死”開頭之三：觀點(diǎn)模糊 態(tài)度曖昧(噴血指數(shù)：☆☆☆)

典型失敗案例： Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……

“見官死”開頭之四：偏離主題 無軌電車(噴血指數(shù)：☆☆☆☆)

典型失敗案例：Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? (雅思真題)

I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.

“見官死”開頭之五：語法錯(cuò)誤 慘不忍睹(噴血指數(shù)：☆☆☆)

典型失敗案例：Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished? (雅思真題)

About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should.

“見官死”開頭之六：過分簡單 沒有重點(diǎn)(噴血指數(shù)：☆☆)

典型失敗案例：Topic-The importance of environmental protection

This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!

“見官死”開頭之七：用詞不當(dāng) 表達(dá)不準(zhǔn) (噴血指數(shù)：☆☆)

典型失敗案例：Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?

I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family.

“見官死”開頭之八：意思重復(fù) 原地踏步(噴血指數(shù)：☆☆☆)

典型失敗案例：Topic-Your opinion on DINK families

My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society.