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英語(yǔ)四級(jí)作文題目： "Women in the Modern World"
英語(yǔ)四級(jí)作文提綱：
1. Women are playing an increasingly important part in society today.________
2. With the changes in their social role, women’s position in the family has been improved as well. ______
3. In spite of these changes, the liberation of women has not been completely realized. __
例1． （2分段）
Women are playing an increasingly important part in society today. Long age, women only did something in the kitchen or at home. Now many of them have serious jobs to serve for people. What men can do so can women.
With the changes in their social role, women’s position in the family has been improved as well. Today in the family, the wife often lots her husband to do something at home bat ago, only women did something. Men are foned of doing something at home.
In spite of these changes, the liberation of women has not been completely realized. Sometimes, the matter, the husband hitting has welf, often happened. In the factory the wonmen to as much as the men, but they are paid less than the men. Some people have not completely realized the liberation of women.
東方教育點(diǎn)評(píng)：條理不清，思路紊亂，大部分句子均有錯(cuò)誤，有的甚至影響理解。具體問(wèn)題剖析如下：
(1)缺乏邏輯，東一句西一句，沒(méi)有圍繞中心論述，如第一段就沒(méi)有展開(kāi)論述婦女社會(huì)角色的轉(zhuǎn)變，說(shuō)得太籠統(tǒng)而缺乏說(shuō)服力。
?。?）用漢語(yǔ)思維，句子有明顯的漢語(yǔ)痕跡，如"What men can do so can women."，應(yīng)改為"Women can do what men can do"。
?。?）銜接不自然，沒(méi)有用適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞，如"Sometimes, the matter, the husband hitting has welf, often happened"，應(yīng)改為"The case that husband hits his wife often happens. "
（4）拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤很多，大部分句子均有錯(cuò)誤。
例2．（5分段 ）
Women are playing an increasingly important part in society today. In today, many women have a work. They worked as well as men playing an important part in factories. There are many women in government also. They lead other people country, and make out plans. There are many scientist slso. They event new things to improve our life.
With the changes in their social role, women’s position in the family has been improved as well. In ancient, women’s position in family is pity. They had to looks after their children, did every how husband ordered her to do. But now it is changed. They are equal to her husband. They have the right of speaking of idea, discussion thing with her husband, do what she wants to do.
