雅思寫作銜接難題 靈活運用代詞及掌握內(nèi)容呼應(yīng)

　　許多學(xué)生在攻克了詞匯語法以及審題難關(guān)后，雅思寫作還是5-5.5分，很大一部分原因是由于“Coherence and Cohesion(銜接和連貫)”的掌握欠佳?；舜罅康臅r間去記憶類似于consequently, admittedly的關(guān)聯(lián)詞，恨不得每一句前面都加一個自己覺得合適的連接詞。這種做法并不符合評分標準，會被定義為過度使用銜接成分，合適的運用方式應(yīng)該是這樣的：

　　劍橋雅思真題9的一篇考官范文，一起來看看“連貫和銜接”的使用。

　　題目：Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required.

　　Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.A problem of modern societies is the declining level of health in the general population, with conflicting views on how to tackle this worrying trend.

　　通過代詞this的使用使得“現(xiàn)象”與大眾對現(xiàn)象的看法產(chǎn)生了銜接，清晰簡潔，不留痕跡做到了評分準則中的“uses cohesion in such a way that it attracts no attention”

　　Onepossible solution is to provide more sports facilities to encourage a more lifestyle.

　　通過 “one possible”寫出了后文還會提到提到其他的解決方案，從而體現(xiàn)了后文在分段和內(nèi)容上與總觀點的對應(yīng)，即評分準則中的”skilfully manages paragraphing“

　　Advocates ofthis believe that today’s sedentary lifestyle and stressful working

　　通過this的使用把主體段與“首段”緊密聯(lián)系起來

　　conditions mean that physical activity is no longer part of either our work or our leisure time. If there were easy-to-reach local sports centres, we would be more

　　通過對于關(guān)鍵詞的修飾進一步論證了論點中涉及的關(guān)鍵重心內(nèi)容，體現(xiàn)了內(nèi)容的深化，論據(jù)與觀點的銜接(即增多“sports facilities”的第一個原因：需要讓大眾更方便做運動)

　　likely to make exercise a regular part of our lives, rather than just collapsing in front of a screen every evening. The variety of sports that could be offered would

　　作用同上“通過對于關(guān)鍵詞的修飾進一步論證了論點中涉及的關(guān)鍵重心內(nèi)容，體現(xiàn)了內(nèi)容的深化，論據(jù)與觀點的銜接”(即增多“sports facilities”的第二個原因：需要滿足更多人的需求)，兩個原因之間并沒有生硬的使用“Firstly, Secondly”

　　cater for all ages, levels of fitness and interests: those with painful memories of PE at school might be happier in the swimming pool than on the football pitch.However, there may be better ways of tackling this problem. Interest in sport is

　　通過代詞”this ”的使用，是的此段觀點與題目相聯(lián)系(即在此段會寫出“other possible ways”),并且與上一段形成并列關(guān)系

　　not universal, and additional facilities might simply attract the already fit, not those who most need them. Physical activity could be encouraged relatively cheaply, for example by installing exercise equipment in parks, as my local council has done. This has the added benefit that parents and children often use them

　　“This”代替前面的措施，前后句之間因此產(chǎn)生緊密聯(lián)系

　　together just for fun, which develops a positive attitude to exercise at an early age.

　　“which”代替前面所描述的“增加equipment”的直接影響，使主句和從句，直接影響和間接影響產(chǎn)生聯(lián)系

　　As well as physical activity, high tax penalties could be imposed on high-fat food

　　products, tobacco and alcohol, as excessive consumption of any of these

　　(普通連接詞“as”后接原因) (“these”代詞的使用加強主從句之間的聯(lián)系)

　　contributes to poor health. Even improving public transport would help: it takes longer to walk to the bus stop than to the car.In my opinion, focusing on sports facilities is too narrow an approach and would not have the desired results. People should be encouraged not only to be more physically active but also to adopt a healthier lifestyle in general.

　　通過以上的分析可以看出，考官是極少使用明顯生硬的連接詞的，而是通過緊扣論點的論據(jù)分類，代詞的準確應(yīng)用以及論點與分論點的內(nèi)容呼應(yīng)達到“不留痕跡，分段得體”的狀態(tài)的。同學(xué)們要做到“連貫與銜接”的完美展現(xiàn)，謝爽老師建議大家掌握 “代詞”的靈活應(yīng)用和內(nèi)容的彼此聯(lián)系才是真諦。